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05 November 2011 @ 01:49 am
The Dragon Scroll - Prologue  

Humility is the first step.


To some feeding fish was a chore, to him it was the ultimate relaxation.
He was distracted by a faint popping noise behind him. The smoke was a dead giveaway.


"You better have a damn good reason to come here."
"My Lord, we have found it."


"The scroll resides in the village of Takemizu. My source tells me it has been there for many years."


"Is it... obtainable?"


"Easily. Their measly defenses will be crushed in an instant"


"Excellent. Gather your men. Tomorrow we ride."


"As you wish."
Another faint pop and the ninja disappeared into the darkness. He shook his head. Ninja and their flashy ways. Still, they served their purpose.


"Finally..."

Notes:
So, my first ever attempt at writing a sims story. As you might have guessed it's a sort-of-retelling of the dragon legend from Bon Voyage. Anyway, I'd love to hear your opinion!
I'm not sure about the picture size, I usually use 600x450, so they look a bit small to me. Should I make them bigger next time?
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olivethegreat: abrianna carnahanolivethegreat on November 5th, 2011 01:02 am (UTC)
This is awesome so far! I cannot wait for more. :)
I think the pictures could perhaps be a bit bigger, but I would not say they are too small.
Keoni: sims yumikeoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 08:36 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm so glad you like it :D
Thanks for the input, I'll definitely make them bigger next time.
skellington7dskellington7d on November 5th, 2011 01:07 am (UTC)
Eeee I can't wait for more! Your lighting and sets are so beautiful and atmospheric. Your pictures don't look too small, but if you wanted to do bigger I don't think anyone would complain.
Keoni: sims ninjakeoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 08:38 pm (UTC)
Eeeee! I'm so glad you like it :D That really means a lot to me. And thanks for the input, I think I'll make them a little bigger in the next chapter.
krolowa_francjikrolowa_francji on November 5th, 2011 01:11 am (UTC)
Consider me hooked!
(I agree with olivethegrat, though - the story would be easier to read if the pictures were a bit bigger.)
Keoni: sims scenerykeoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 08:40 pm (UTC)
Yay! I'm so glad you like it. :D
Thanks for the input, bigger pictures next chapter :)
Doda_Lanidoda_lani on November 5th, 2011 01:12 am (UTC)
Such a very interesting teaser, I'm so teased. waiting for chapter 1 :) :)
Keoni: sims lionkeoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 08:40 pm (UTC)
I'm glad you liked it! I had so much fun shooting this, so it makes me happy to hear that :)
blackdaisiessimtopi on November 5th, 2011 01:17 am (UTC)
Very, very intrigued. And your pictures are amazing, but I have a feeling I'll be saying that a lot (judging from what I've seen so far!). Can't wait to read more.

I also don't think your pics are too small.
Keoni: sims ninjakeoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 08:44 pm (UTC)
*Squeels
I'm so glad you liked it! Both your an Skell's story were such an inspiration to me, so you liking it really means a lot :) (Damn, that sounds corny... it's true though)
So thank you!
jenga218jenga218 on November 5th, 2011 01:21 am (UTC)
Oooh, I love this so far, and I think you're off to a great start. So much mystery! :)
Keoni: sims lion2keoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 08:45 pm (UTC)
I'm so glad you like it! Thank you so much :D
bees_universebees_universe on November 5th, 2011 01:42 am (UTC)
Loved the prologue! Ninja story :) ooo lala!
Imma "big picture junkie" so I prefer looking at big picture cause my eye sight is horrible. lol They aren't too small, I would just recommend making them a little bit bigger, especially when dealing with night scenes cause its difficult to see...or that just may be me. lol
Keoni: sims lionkeoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 08:47 pm (UTC)
:D I'm so glad you like it! I'm such a sucker for ninja, I love the mystery around them.
I have the same horrible eyesight and I was wondering if it was just me being used to bigger pictures, or it really was a bit difficult to see.
So thanks for your input, I'll do bigger pictures for the next chapter :)
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Keonikeoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 08:49 pm (UTC)
Yay! glad you like it! :D

Yeah, it's the far east vacation spot. You can learn the dragon legend at the secret lot there, an old hermit tells you the story.
Awww, that is unlucky. Ninja are pretty cool :)
Gracestonell on November 5th, 2011 03:47 am (UTC)
I have a feeling i'm going to friggin love this story. I love your pictures. They are a little small to me but I'm not complaining at all, I'm just way too stoked about this.
Keoni: sims yumikeoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 08:50 pm (UTC)
Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it! I really hope you'll enjoy the rest of the story, too. I'll do my best :D
And thank you for the input, bigger pictures it is :)
Emmamarazion on November 5th, 2011 03:52 am (UTC)
I loved this! Looking forward to more. :)
Keoni: sims lionkeoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 08:51 pm (UTC)
I'm glad you liked it! Thank you! :D
Antimaccassarantimaccassar on November 5th, 2011 04:13 am (UTC)
Oooh, this is lovely! Can't wait for more!
Keoni: sims ninja2keoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 08:51 pm (UTC)
:D Thank you so much, it makes me happy to hear that!
A/Yesperesa on November 5th, 2011 08:44 am (UTC)
What a lovely idea to write a story about! I got curious from the pictures you posted and you did not disappoint. Your pictures are just beautiful - love the one with the fish, especially.
I wasn't bothered by the picture size, but 600x450 might indeed be easier to look at. :)
Ga zo door!
Keoni: sims ninjakeoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 08:56 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! I really had so much fun setting it all up, so I'm happy to hear you like it. And I really should thank you, I literary raided you dreamwidth while hunting for CC. Your downloads really helped making it all look more "authentic", so thank you so much for that!
Ik ga m'n best doen! :D
bacc_krowbacc_krow on November 5th, 2011 09:13 am (UTC)
Oooh. I look forward to this, I'm sure it'll be loads of fun to read. :D Like others have said - the pictures aren't too small, but I'd certainly experiment with making them closer to 600x450.
Keonikeoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 08:57 pm (UTC)
Yay, I'm glad you like it! Thanks for the input, judging on the other comments, bigger pics it is :)
zhue on November 5th, 2011 11:56 am (UTC)
*thumbs up* :)
Keoni: sims scenerykeoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 08:58 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
eefje00704eefje00704 on November 5th, 2011 01:30 pm (UTC)
Love it so far! I don't even know what the dragon legend is (shows how well I know the game, I suppose) but it'll be fun to find out!

Keoni: sim ghostkeoni_chan on November 5th, 2011 09:00 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad you like it :)
Oh, an unspoiled reader ;D I hope you'll enjoy it!